Post by Deleted on May 16, 2015 8:29:58 GMT -5
CHARACTER NAME Taylor bauro
| Alias: Tay Age: 12 Gender: Female Orientation: Straight
City:bayonada Class: Trainer Occupation: currently, she writes and edits books Rank: none | DIRECTORY & OOC INFO Directory Info: [h1]OOCNAME[/h1][ul][li][a href=""]CharaName[/a] PLAYED BY [u]FCName[/u], [i]Series[/i] [/li][/ul] Continuity: Original Other Characters: noneNEWBIE NOOKNook: adventurer pack |
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Appearance
Are there any physical attributes people should take notice of? Do they have piercings, a tattoo? scars etc. You may also write out a description if you'd like but it's not necessary.
Personality
Provide a sentence or two for each trait to describe your characters personality. You can also list a few likes or dislikes; How do they treat their opponents during battle, or do they care for the Pokemon under their wing? Ambitions: Taylor, as mentioned before wants to travel the world. se also would like to someday meet and befriend many different pokemon and people. she hopes to also find a traveling partner due to her lack of family. History
Taylor was born in the flash city but she had sworn to never go back. Taylor's parents did not like pokemon and their daughter did, causing a lot of arguing and family tension. As a young girl, Taylor loved pokemon and every time she talked about them her parents would scream at her, telling her to be quite and stop talking about tools. as Taylor grew up, her parents began to ignore her so one day, she just left. as she traveled around, sight seeing and looking for a place to live, she gained 2 pokemon that she trains and raises with care. they were an a pichu whom she named joy and a horsea whom she named bubble.Taylor has never owned a house of her own as she could never find a place to stay, so she and her pokemon have been sleeping outside, using the money taylor had earned from writing to eat. Taylors parents have been tring to find their daughter, but they have not gotten the police involved. Taylor hopes her parents do not find her, as she doesnt want to return to them ever again. one day, a house went up for sale in bayonada. As taylor began her trek to her new home, she had her first ever pokemon trainer battle against a male trainer and his rattata. Taylor won using her horsea, and did finally make it to her new house in bayonada. Pokemon
You start out with 2 Pokemon unless your Class in the Guidebook states otherwise. You may also include the Newbi Nook if it applies. Imports can have a total of 10 pokemon 5 of them being rares, and if you are importing a rare Pokemon, please place this next to their sprite: SPECIES: Horsea ALIAS: bubble GENDER: Female ABILITY: swift swim. MOVE SET: dragon pulse | bubble beam |water gun | dragon dance SPECIES: pichuALIAS: joy GENDER: Female ABILITY: static MOVE SET: thunder wave |tail whip | thundershock | sweet kiss Misc
Anything else we should know or needs to be pointed out - psychic/aura abilities, alternate identities, business details, etc.
RP Sample
my first character
Taylor walked along the moon lit shore by the ocean in bayonada. she smiled as she saw the waves reflecting the moonlight so nicely 'its perfect here' she thought as she sat down to look at the water and reflect on her day. sighing with contentment she let out her pokemon so they could play. she smiled as she watched her pokemon run around in circles. grabbing her note book she began to write in her journal 'arrived at my new house in bayonada. its far away from my old home but it's very nice here' carefully, she returned her journal to her bag. she jumped up when she heard a rustle behind her and relaxed as she saw a wild pidove. slowly, she took some bread crumbs out from her bag and opened her hand out to the bird pokemon. she watched in dismay as the pidove pecked her pichu, joy. "hey! be nice" she yelled at the bird and it flew away. she went to her joy and picked up the pokemon. she winced and fed joy an oran berry from her bag. "there all better" she said, trying to mask her anger at a wild pokemon attacking joy for no reason.
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Post by Lady on May 16, 2015 10:25:16 GMT -5
First of all, welcome to the site! However, there are quite a few things that you need to fix on your application before your character can be accepted. First thing, is that we require you to make note of what anime face claim you are using in the directory information. If you do not know, then please note it as Original Art and Unknown Artist. I'd like to know a little more about your characters appearance? How tall are they? How much do they weigh? What type of posture do they have? Do they slouch? Do they stand really straight and tall? Do they have any scars, or birthmarks? What type of clothing does she wear? Has she created her own personal style? Your personality needs to be at least 150 words long or needs to be in trait/list format to be accepted. Also, I don't see any weakness to her character. She has a lot of strengths, but what are her weaknesses? What types of things make her upset? Does she have a temper? Is she a little too loud at times? These are just examples of questions you could answer. I would like to know more about her personality. I'm going to go out of order here and talk about the Pokemon Taylor has before I hit on the history. As and original, you may only start out with two Pokemon unless you take a Pokemon from the Newbie Nook (which is linked below your picture in your app). These Pokemon cannot be rare and must have only up to four Natural moves up to level 50. Your Horsea's moves Aurora Beam and Substitute are not natural moves. Your Pichu's moves Thunder Bolt, Protect, and Disarming Voice are also not moves that are naturally learned by your Pokemon. Please remove these moves and replace them with Natural Moves. You cannot start with a rare Pokemon, and Eevee is a rare Pokemon. Please remove the Eevee from your starting Pokemon list. We also ask that you replace the Bulbasaur sprites with the proper sprites for your Pokemon. This is a good sprite resource.When it comes to the newbie nook, you can choose one of the packs or an extra starter from the list of Pokemon that are in the Nook. If you choose either one, please note which pack or Pokemon you are taking. I have a few issues with her history. Your history must be at least 150 words in length. Also, because you cannot start with a rare Pokemon, mentioning of your Eevee should be removed from your history. I would like to know more about what else she has done so far. Has she had any cool trainer battles? Have her parents tried to find her? Also, your character should be living in the Nue region, so how did she get to Nue from Kalos? How is she earning money to survive? Does she stay in Pokemon centers and travel, or was she able to find an actual place to live? Lastly, your RP sample needs to be at least 150 words long to match the sites word count. Please add to this. When you have updated your application, please re-post a link to it in the Mod Summons Shout box.
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Post by Lady on May 17, 2015 10:54:03 GMT -5
There are a few more things that have to be cleared up in your app before we can go through and accept it.
I apologize for not catching this before, but your characters occupation states that they write and edit books. Age-wise, she is still very young and likely would not have the skill or know-how to write full blown novels, unless stated elsewhere like her personality or history that she had a great talent for the trade. If you wish to keep this occupation, I would suggest bumping up her age to mid to late teens. If you decide to go that route, I'd like to know how they got into writing books, and possibly who they are working with or selling those books too. Are they children's books or books of poems? Just extra information like that.
Another thing is that as a 12 year old, buying a house is not plausible. She would have had to have won multitudes of battles to even pay for a deposit or down payment on a house. There are alternatives like PokeCenter's that house those without homes of their own for free. Maybe she had a friend that lived in Bayonada and their parents let her stay with them? Maybe she found a really low cost apartment? These are just ideas, but owning her own home is not likely, even if she was writing books.
You need to fill out your directory information with your Cbox name, Character name, what Face Claim you are using for your character, and the artist, show, game, etc that that character is from.
In addition, please check your grammar and spelling before reposting your app for acceptance.
When you have updated your application, please re-post a link to it in the Mod Summons Shout box.
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